Teen Poetry #4 |
The Faerie Ring |
knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
we dance along the rinding way circling each other in these steps the light from the moon is shining in your eyes as we twirl in and around this faerie ring we reveal in the innocense of this waltz laughing with the joyfullness of such pleasure the innocense of the young lost in each other as they escape reality in the faerie ring we got swept away in the land of no time continuing forever without even trying the concept of when lost in this daze as we're trapped in the charm of this faerie ring we try to remember the time of before thinking of when our world was not perfect the perfection of an unperfect place as we struggle to break out of the faerie ring “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Wow, this is good kinda different in a way but good i like it *Tears of love* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey, cool! Is this about the Briarlea Faerie Ring? That immediately drew me into the poem. I had fun dancing with you on the ring, sis! I've been writing about these places myself... I want to do a lighthouse poem! But it's not working so far. Whaa Ah well. You did a great job on this poem, I love it a lot... keep on posting for us! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Firstly, awesome title. For once someone spelt faerie right!! I liked the way you kept the faerie ring line incorporated in each stanza. That really added a good effect to the piece. Well done, Tiff. ~AF~ Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved." |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
heeeey, kool poem, i really liked it. dunno what else to say...i liked it lol. now i'm repeating myself...yay. just remember that i liked it. -fear- |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
YAY! FAERIE STUFF! I, too, liked the title and the way you incorporated the faering at the end of each stanza. Very cool, very neat! ¤ ¢H@§ïÑg RåIñ ¤ "If I find in myself desires which nothing in this world can satisfy, the only logical explanation is that i was made for another world." |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
I liked this one, Nice job. fall hard, practice harder not to fall |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
I love the topic! Great work. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
I love the topic! Great work. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
I love the topic! Great work. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great job here...i really enjoyed the poem greatly tiff...the title was well thought of ...bye i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Meggie1986 Junior Member
since 2001-05-22
Posts 41California |
Very nice. It's different, and it made for a nice change. I love how the ending is the same, but different in each stanza. I also love the ideas of faerie rings. Beautiful job! *One meets his destiny often in the road he takes to avoid it. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here. I enjoyed this poem. I liked the message within it Tiff. Well done! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is good i liked it. well done. katie We all make mistakes. We all cause others pain. DEAL |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Awesome read and the imagery was nice...very fantasy like |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
nice job Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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