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On Christian Living - A Dramatic Monologue
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On Christian Living - A Dramatic Monologue |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I would have liked to call this poem "On Christian Living an my Confusion in Such Living," but I fear that there was too little space to write that title. Therefore, I ask that you take the second title, which I have just described here, as the best title for this piece. When conqu'ring minds are set to strike my only home, I sit and wait and think of something great To ward away the creatures as they roam Toward some unseen cover to lie in wait. In all my failures, all my triumphs... I I lose my sight of great and glori'us truths, Forget my life of joy and service... mine Own life of thought and joy and love and truth! And when they strike and hack upon my own Beliefs, and when the others fall and wait And cry, just what am I to do? They sigh Their final breath, and I am left with truth. But what to do with this, my only truth... "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I think you could go much further with this and maybe explain a bit more....this left me waiting for the rest....but I liked  |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i think also...this poem needs a bit more to it...to be felt as whole to me.,.i really liekd where you are going with it...very interetsing...good luck on the revise ...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I agree with SEA... you might expand just a tad for those of us who have trouble understanding. I can see what you are saying still, I love what you write about, your subject matter is always so deep and meaningful. Can't wait to read more from you, Frac.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Frac, not your best but I do realize a theme with your recent poetry. A lot of religious themes in them. I like this one, but still not your best.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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