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Junior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 32
Australia

0 posted 2001-05-31 06:02 PM

My fear is something I cannot chose
It shields me from light and tells me what to do
It blackens my eyes and throws me against a wall
In my bedroom
It draws up bars in front of me and makes my soul a prison
Locked up and lost
It does what it wants and takes control
It doesn't see the love inside
It doesn't know what I know
What I feel
What I need
It throws me onto the bed
And does what it wants
And I lie there and take it
It hides sometimes
I'm not sure where
In the silent shadows of rooms
I know it's there
I sit quietly
Everything is ok
But I know it's there

~I'd rather see the world from another angle~ Jewel.

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

1 posted 2001-05-31 06:37 PM

ohhh i really like this, first peice ive read by you, im looking foward to seeing more

*KiMMiE*

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

2 posted 2001-05-31 09:30 PM

wow....this is excellent..i love the imagery you use!!!..have i told you that im a fan?...hahha...yep well you got a fan !!!..great job on this one!!! i liked it heaps!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-05-31 10:35 PM

wow...so creepy....in a really good read sort of way...

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-06-01 01:02 AM

hit me hard!...i related to this alot...very nicely told through great imagery

...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-06-02 02:55 AM

Well done here. This was so creepy. I mean i could feel this one hard and heavy. You really did this well. You portrayed yourself and some defenseless person and as a victim. You really put a powerful impact within this poem. I enjoyed it.