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| Teen Poetry #4 |
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Nothings everything with you |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
we've always loved so strong baby girl, where did we go wrong. You used to smile all the time but now it's only in my mind. Your eyes always shined so bright now their like a burned out candle light. Witch places didn't I touch, witch words did I screw up. We used to laugh so much, our heart were so in love. I have got it all, but if it's all without you I'll take nothing at all cause nothings everything with you. why didn't you call, when you needed me to without you there is all, but nothings everything with you. We always loved so sweet baby girl, now it's only in need. I knew you loved no doubt but now your heart makes no sound Everything bout us said love feels like every feeling is turn of. Witch sentence’s miss spelled, witch words did I screw up. We always shared what we felt, what happen to our love. I have got it all, but if it's all without you I'll take nothing at all cause nothings everything with you. why didn't you call, when you needed me to without you there is all, but nothings everything with you. So many things I thought we had a lot of love I want back, many words I didn't get to say, somthing git stuck on the way. I have got it all, but if it's all without you I'll take nothing at all cause nothings everything with you. I have got it all, but if it's all without you I'll take nothing at all cause nothings everything with you. why didn't you call, when you needed me to without you there is all, but nothings everything with you. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked it...expressed nicely...hope thing turn out best for you  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
wow that was really good I like the whole title and theme going on in it. the paradox of nothing being everything was great |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
that was really great, and I could relate to it. Yeah. Byes. I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here. I enjoyed this poem a lot.  |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
this was really good. i could relate to this. good job on the poem. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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