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0 posted 2001-05-29 10:32 AM


we've always loved so strong
baby girl, where did we go wrong.
You used to smile all the time
but now it's only in my mind.
Your eyes always shined so bright
now their like a burned out candle light.

Witch places didn't I touch,
witch words did I screw up.
We used to laugh so much,
our heart were so in love.

I have got it all,
but if it's all without you
I'll take nothing at all
cause nothings everything with you.
why didn't you call,
when you needed me to
without you there is all,
but nothings everything with you.

We always loved so sweet
baby girl, now it's only in need.
I knew you loved no doubt
but now your heart makes no sound
Everything bout us said love
feels like every feeling is turn of.

Witch sentence’s miss spelled,
witch words did I screw up.
We always shared what we felt,
what happen to our love.

I have got it all,
but if it's all without you
I'll take nothing at all
cause nothings everything with you.
why didn't you call,
when you needed me to
without you there is all,
but nothings everything with you.

So many things I thought we had
a lot of love I want back,
many words I didn't get to say,
somthing git stuck on the way.

I have got it all,
but if it's all without you
I'll take nothing at all
cause nothings everything with you.

I have got it all,
but if it's all without you
I'll take nothing at all
cause nothings everything with you.
why didn't you call,
when you needed me to
without you there is all,
but nothings everything with you.

© Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-29 11:34 AM


i liked it...expressed nicely...hope thing turn out best for you

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the_rescue
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2 posted 2001-05-29 11:37 AM


wow that was really good I like the whole title and theme going on in it. the paradox of nothing being everything was great
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3 posted 2001-05-29 02:03 PM


that was really great, and I could relate to it. Yeah. Byes.

I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish)

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4 posted 2001-05-29 10:44 PM


Well done here. I enjoyed this poem a lot.

LoneWolf
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5 posted 2001-05-29 10:55 PM


this was really good. i could relate to this. good job on the poem.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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