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katherine
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since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

0 posted 2001-05-28 03:44 AM

I know I haven't really been replying lately but I've been really stressed out cause of exams. This poem isn't great. I wrote it in maths today. I don't really know why i called it blue guess i just did.

The bleekness showing through the high windows.
Sitting in this class room nothing quite seems real.
I hear nothing but their mindless natter, it hall just flows over me not takeing anything in.

The teachers talking but i can't comprehend what shes saying. I get the feeling no ones even listerning.

My mind and body are no longer one. My mind has wondered while my body stays with me here in reality. The room looks so different now, this won't last.

The bleekness form the outsides creeping in.

We all make mistakes. We all cause others pain. DEAL

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-05-28 04:10 AM

Nicely done here. I really liked the feeling I got in this poem. I think Blue is a nice title for it too.
Well done on this.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

2 posted 2001-05-28 11:10 AM

Well done a great poem, well done I really liked it loads

keep up the good work and hope to see more work soon

Zu

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-05-28 12:12 PM

Good to see you making use of your maths classes.

Your opening line really makes the whole piece so amazing.

Thanks for the read.

~AF~

Know what you want. Become your real self.
~ David Harold Fink ~

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-05-28 01:31 PM

i really liked the feeling that this poem was written in...its something time after time we exist in...and you wrote it very well...wonderful poem!...i enjoyed this poem greatly

...hope to see more

...?

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

5 posted 2001-05-28 03:24 PM

ya know...I wrote one after my biology exam, so ya know...

but it was a good poem. great really, hope to hear more from you soon.

oh, and don't worry about spelling...it's evil....

lol
*s*
Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

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