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Um...I Like you
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Um...I Like you |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV 
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I used to walk the wrong way Down the hall, just to see you I’d smile and wave at you I thought of you along my way I wrote countless letters to you Telling you how I felt Everyone seemed to know but you But I could never find the words One day I even got to hug you And you asked me for my number You called me that night But I still couldn’t tell you It took me a couple weeks But the words finally came out And you said you felt the same That was two months ago And we’re still together And I love you More that I ever did before. Those girls on TV don't know that being |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this was a sweet poem...you told the situation very well...nicely written...and hope to see more  ...?i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
awwwww...sweet poem tamma...i loved the story it told..  ...thank you for sharing "Life is not long and boring, |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
that's not fair!!!!!! when I wrote my crush a letter telling him how I felt, he said he didn't feel the same way  but, I'll get over it!! it was a really good poem....thanx for sharing!! *s* Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
That's is exactly what happened to me except for the last part  oh well, at least now I know letters work Good job."The heart can think of no devotion |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done Tamma.....another beautiful poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Well done Tamma another excellent piece of poetry and one that I can identify with Zu |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
You and your guys, Tamma.  It's a lovely piece. I'm glad someone like this is making you happy. ~AF~ Know what you want. Become your real self. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
a heart-warming poem...glad to know that all ends well for your case... |
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holatuwol Member
since 2001-04-27
Posts 72California, USA |
Wow... I have to say that I liked almost the entire poem for this one. ^_^ hehehe The style is very simple, and it was a really cute poem almost all the way through... it held all sorts of feelings of anticipation and... x_X Why does it seem to hold an aura of innocence, too? It's just... cute! ^^v I thought the ending was too predictable, though... ^^; Not that predictability is a bad thing, but it seems almost all too cliché to end it that way... seems to cliché to end it any other way, too... x_X Ah, well... other than the way the poem flowed toward the ending, I thought the poem was cute in so many different ways. The way it echoed, the way it felt when you read it... and I have a thing for cute poems... I'm going to steal this one and put it in the library... hehehe *steals the poem and puts it in the library* Write more, Tamma! I gotta practice my thievery skills, and to do that, you gotta write more poems to steal! ^_^v Until next time. - holatuwol |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
aww, sweet. This was way awesome Tamma. I wrote my crush a poem and HE asked me out and we went out for three weeks then broke up and everything got complicated. I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very nice work, Tamma! I noticed an improved technique in here from when I last saw your writing. The repitition of the word "you" at the end of lines made a really nice feel to it when I read it through. The sentiments are also something to be adored, just simply a sweet poem. These are always nice to read. Best of luck in the future too! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Meggie1986 Junior Member
since 2001-05-22
Posts 41California |
Yay~ a happy ending! Very sweet and hope you stay together for a long time. Very nice poem and well writen. |
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