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Tamma
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0 posted 2001-05-27 11:55 AM


I used to walk the wrong way
Down the hall, just to see you
I’d smile and wave at you
I thought of you along my way
I wrote countless letters to you
Telling you how I felt
Everyone seemed to know but you
But I could never find the words
One day I even got to hug you
And you asked me for my number
You called me that night
But I still couldn’t tell you
It took me a couple weeks
But the words finally came out
And you said you felt the same
That was two months ago
And we’re still together
And I love you
More that I ever did before.

Those girls on TV don't know that being
36-24-36 doesn't mean a thing unless
you got the face to back it up

© Copyright 2001 Tamma M. Wilson - All Rights Reserved
anonymous albert ?
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1 posted 2001-05-27 06:55 PM


this was a sweet poem...you told the situation very well...nicely written...and hope to see more ...?

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

cherish
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2 posted 2001-05-27 09:06 PM


awwwww...sweet poem tamma...i loved the story it told.. ...thank you for sharing

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

stace_co2003
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In a dream world
3 posted 2001-05-27 09:26 PM


that's not fair!!!!!!

when I wrote my crush a letter telling him how I felt, he said he didn't feel the same way  

but, I'll get over it!! it was a really good poem....thanx for sharing!!

*s*
Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

fozzyozzy
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4 posted 2001-05-27 10:18 PM


That's is exactly what happened to me except for the last part oh well, at least now I know letters work   Good job.

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
Robert Fr

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5 posted 2001-05-28 01:00 AM


Well done Tamma.....another beautiful poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-05-28 10:39 AM


Well done Tamma another excellent piece of poetry and one that I can identify with  
Zu

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7 posted 2001-05-28 12:40 PM


You and your guys, Tamma.  

It's a lovely piece. I'm glad someone like this is making you happy.

~AF~

Know what you want. Become your real self.
~ David Harold Fink ~

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8 posted 2001-05-28 12:43 PM


a heart-warming poem...glad to know that all ends well for your case...
holatuwol
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9 posted 2001-05-28 04:34 PM


Wow... I have to say that I liked almost the entire poem for this one. ^_^  hehehe  The style is very simple, and it was a really cute poem almost all the way through... it held all sorts of feelings of anticipation and... x_X  Why does it seem to hold an aura of innocence, too?  It's just... cute! ^^v

I thought the ending was too predictable, though... ^^;  Not that predictability is a bad thing, but it seems almost all too cliché to end it that way... seems to cliché to end it any other way, too... x_X  Ah, well... other than the way the poem flowed toward the ending, I thought the poem was cute in so many different ways.  The way it echoed, the way it felt when you read it... and I have a thing for cute poems...

I'm going to steal this one and put it in the library... hehehe  *steals the poem and puts it in the library*  Write more, Tamma!  I gotta practice my thievery skills, and to do that, you gotta write more poems to steal! ^_^v  Until next time.


- holatuwol

Allysa
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10 posted 2001-05-29 08:22 AM


aww, sweet. This was way awesome Tamma.  I wrote my crush a poem and HE asked me out and we went out for three weeks then broke up and everything got complicated.  

I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish)

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11 posted 2001-05-29 10:40 PM


Very nice work, Tamma!  
I noticed an improved technique in here from when I last saw your writing.  The repitition of the word "you" at the end of lines made a really nice feel to it when I read it through.
The sentiments are also something to be adored, just simply a sweet poem.  These are always nice to read.  
Best of luck in the future too!
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

Meggie1986
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12 posted 2001-05-29 10:46 PM


Yay~ a happy ending!  Very sweet and hope you stay together for a long time.  Very nice poem and well writen.
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