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Hitting Speed Bumps
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Hitting Speed Bumps |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: Ok guys, sorry.......I despise this poem with passion. Why? The last line. *vomits* Seriously, i KNOW this is not my best so you don't have to tell me. This is just a post for the sake of a post. Read if you dare: Hitting Speed Bumps: Silence spoken without a thought. We're shaded with a love of rot. It seems hostility slowly came With problems and simple blame. Someday though we'll fully unite. Smiling knowing it was right. The problems come and problems go, But you and I will always flow.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Very interseting poem you have here, but after getting past that it is a rather well written poem and i like it a very lot. Keep posting |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i didnt think the last line was bad at all.. kinda compares you and her to poetry, which is quite beautiful good job bud ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... not bad at all. Don't be so hard on yourself. We don't always impress ourselves with our own work. Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Certainly not your best, but it's still good  You mean you can post just for the sake of posting? hmmm......< !signature-->"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 01-11-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
You could learn a thing or two, Lake. I do it as well, it's quite catchy. ~_^ Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
i liked it, really..it wasn't bad at all. and i post all the time just for the sake of posting keep it up babe*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
This is great Dopey, you are way to hard on yourself!! Keep up the great work!! Melz!!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Thanks all........ I wish I was special- radiohead I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
cmon, it was good. not your best. but still very good Regina |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i don't think it's bad at all i think the whole poem was good all in all i don't see naything wrong Dopes keep em coming I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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sweetypie5 Member
since 2000-10-06
Posts 97MWC,OK,USA |
Yo it was good!!! Don't be soo hard on urself!! Oh yeah go read the poem me and sweetstuff wrote dedicated to you!!! Buh bye! Keep writing! *~*Hope is a walking dream*~* *~*Don't take life too seriosly~~~you'll never get out alive*~* |
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