Teen Poetry #4 |
true death |
Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
The body always dies but when shall the mind? thought cracks and splinters dreams fade and die wisedom trips and falls love fails and breaks this is true death the real thing the place where all pain generates the destruction of you soul the obliteration of your heart the suffocation of your mind true death true pain cannot be controlled i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow.....hope all is ok.....this is intense |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
powerful!...graet poem...i enjoyed this greatly...hope to see more... ...? ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!! |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
very powerful writing here Ben! I enjoyed this one immensely!! wow. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
jeez...This one made me sit back and really take in all that was being said. Thank you for such a powerful piece. ~AF~ "I'm not a slave to a God that doesn't exist." |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
OOh kinda spooky here. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
very intense poem here, Ben. I loved the last stanza... that's very powerful. I hope all is okay. I enjoyed this quite a bit. Thanks for sharing. --Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced. |
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