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Lost in my own world

0 posted 2001-05-24 09:52 AM


Lost Holding On

I'm here all alone
No where to go
No where to turn
Just heading down
This one-way road
Lost in this world
That's still spinnin 'round
I've been knocked down
With my feet on the ground

I just can't find a way
To let it all go
All my thoughts
All my feelings
I'm on my own
Don't know how
To fill this emptiness
Seems like my life
Is just a big mess

I try to find my way
But I see nothing
One day, somehow
I'll find something
For right now
This will have to do
Holding my dreams
Of me and you.


**One of the most adventurous things left for us is to go to sleep. For no one can lay a hand on our dreams.**

© Copyright 2001 Renee - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-24 10:41 AM


good stuff I enjoyed it.
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2 posted 2001-05-24 02:31 PM


I really like the title you chose for the poem, i thought it fit it nicely. Good job and keep em comin!
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The Hot Girl From Canada
3 posted 2001-05-24 03:52 PM


This was a good poem
i lokie poems that i can relate to
becoz they remind me of past experiences
and how much better things are now  

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4 posted 2001-05-24 04:15 PM


nice...i enjoyed this poem quite a bit...thanks for sharing it... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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5 posted 2001-05-24 05:10 PM


Well done, very well done. I really liked the ending of it all. It really hit me.
Keep them coming.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-05-24 10:33 PM


wow, i liked this. i can relate. good job here/

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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7 posted 2001-05-29 01:57 PM


Much appreciated read.  This is a good write and enjoyable too. keep posting

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

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