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Teen Poetry #4

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corey14
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 89
Boston, Mass, U.S.A.

0 posted 2001-05-23 06:14 PM

ouch that hurt
its red and orange
wow, its dancing
what is it i ask
but no one knows
i finaly find out
dont touch the fire
the young boy said

corey baker

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-23 06:24 PM

different but interetsing...i enjoyed this poem...keep writing...

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if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-05-23 06:54 PM

Well done, I really liked this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-05-24 11:42 AM

interesting, you have a very unique style in this, i liked reading this a lot. nice job on this, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2001-05-24 02:29 PM

verry interesting...and unique!!! Liked it lots

DarkSilver
Junior Member

since 2001-05-21

Posts 33
Six O'clock High!

5 posted 2001-05-24 03:45 PM

its almost cute in its simplicity and obvious practica meaning thouroughly enjoyable.

It doesn't matter who you are only who you serve. - Draken O'Larn, the Starwarrior Saga

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