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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180
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Im in the dark.. Evil creatures is all over me.. in my mind, and in my body.. I can hear them.. I can feel them.. But I can't see them... I don't know what to do.. Im not me anymore.. All this darkness and evil.. It makes me scared and confused.. This dark is eating me up inside.. Im losing my body. Im losing my mind. And Im falling.. falling into the dark. -This is also an old poem of mine.. Maybe a little chlice, hmm.. - |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
dark...i loved this poem...cuz i relate to it too much to say...u put it so well...thanks for sharing it...and hope to see more...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great....very well done. Pretty dark here, and I'm not tryin to be funny either. I liked this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
actually, I think there could be more to this one..........  |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
im terrified of the dark, this is really true bout the whole being in a dark place type thing!!! good read~ *KiMMiE* |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
This poem ended sort of suddenly for me. Maybe there were a few extra lines that didn't make the final edit. Anyway. I really really like this poem. It'd be a great monologue or something. "The heart can think of no devotion |
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