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Thought about the day |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
The morning breaks the sun rises I awake to this days many suprises A hope of a new day and new pleasures a hope of finding some new treasures Strech out let my feet touch the floor I had 8 hours of sleep but still need more I wake I dress and I'm out the door It's all good I've done it all before Repetition in my mind I do it all the time with out a noice like the voiceless mime quitely I shut the door man I forgot my hat something I must have you know that I run across the yard the dew on my feet wish I had time to smell the air so sweet I fumble with the keys as the door unlocks fly around the corner just a few more blocks I'm speeding cause once again I'm running late A cop pulls me over just another twist of fate He writes the ticket and here I wait traffic violations I'm starting to hate But as I sit, I finally stop to see the morning It's now joy for that ticket instead of mourning A fast paced life, now time to slow down we often forget it's joys, the reason for our frown. I start driving once again ticket in my hand the meaning of life I start to understand it's not about the money, it's not about the glory so what if we're not remembered, we have no story It's all about getting close to the ones you love those that are here on earth & the true God up above about sharing, caring, about laying your life down to help remove your fellow mans frown |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
wow babe you're awesome at writting! i got another poem for ya hun but i won't post it till later. love ya! robin  I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL! |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
ok this one hit home with me. not takin the time to appreciate the things around me and such. the last stanza i just loved....the last line was fantastic!i think you did a great job on this and i like the rhyme of morning and mourning. great job and cant wait to c mores. *hugs* to the library it gos darn you robin! stealin it agains grrrrrrr *smax yas* dork i had it first :P tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” I want to look into your eyes and see you smile at me I want to hear you say "Well done" [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-23-2001).] |
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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
Beautiful *mwah!* |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
wow ive read two of ur poems now and im really looking foward to seeing alot more of your work, you seem like that optimistic kinda person that always writes good poetry..hope to see more! *KiMMiE* |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
hit the button! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
beauitful poem...written so well...hope to see more soon...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
It seems that people know you......can somebody explain the connection between the all of you?  ANyway, well done on the message. Very well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
awwwww javi you feel left out? well i know only the_resue and kinightlyshadows and you lol! robin |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
I know poeticgirl and then knightlyshadows (just met today) the rest apparently just like my stuff YEAH Lol no, I will not get a big head lol. |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This is great...it really shows the multifacetedness (word?) of your work. keep it up! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
uh huh suuuuuuuuuure jimmy! lol! you're a great writer hun keep it up! love ya! robin |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this was soooooooooooo good!!!! i love it!!!  don't worry about speeding tickets, you aren't the only one  Valerie Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
no speeding tickets please lol |
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