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HeAvEnS AnGeL
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The Hot Girl From Canada

0 posted 2001-05-22 06:46 PM


When I look into your eyes,
I'm unsure of how you feel.
I'll try to ask more questions,
To see if your for real.

You make me feel beautiful,
As though I'm better than the rest.
I didn't appriciate myself before,
But I now know I'm the best.

You hold me when I cry,
And you wipe away my tears.
I'm happiest when with you,
I know I have nothing to fear.

I hope that one day soon,
I can call you "mine."
I know that your unsure of things,
So for now we stand on the line.

I do not want to rush things,
I will wait untill the end.
I'm just scared to hear,
"I just want to be friends."

So all my feelings for you,
Have now been stated loud and clear.
I'm now standing on the line,
And I am waiting for you here.

So you can take your time,
Decsions are hard to make.
My heart is in your hands,
For you to take or brake.

© Copyright 2001 Ashley - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-22 06:54 PM


This is really great!! I know just how this feels.....hope it works out the way you'd like it to    SEA
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2 posted 2001-05-22 07:31 PM


I was in a situation like this, about this time last year. I did let the guy know how I felt through poetry, and he rejected me. Looking back, I realize that it could never have worked... but even then, through the heartache that I felt, I knew it was right to let him know how I felt. If I had never let him know, I might still be attached, asking myself "what if?". Anyway, this is a beautiful piece, and I do hope you give this to this person. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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3 posted 2001-05-22 11:09 PM


I liked this much and wish you the best of luck.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-05-23 01:50 AM


very well written poem...i really liked thgis  poem so much...thanks for sharing it and on the situation wish u the best to come...keepw riting... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

zarina
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5 posted 2001-05-23 04:28 AM


good poem.. I liked it very much. I hope everything turns out to the best for you..  
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