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LCsftball16
Junior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 39

0 posted 2001-05-20 11:21 PM

A jump, a missed beat in my heart.
A tingle, a teardrop slowly caresses the path it makes on my face.
A breath, a thought of you only makes me breathe faster.
Time, it stands still when we are together.
Every time, I ask myself why I fall in love so fast.
When you and I are apart, I think of no regrets only of you.
You must have done something so right...
Like living everyday as if there is no tomorrow.
A chill that creeps its way up my spine when I daydream of you.
A thought of the future when I thought we'd be together again...
An end, where you said it was never-ending...
You thought wrong.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-20 11:23 PM

interesting...i enjoyed this a lot as well...great job on the poem...and keep writing...

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if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

2 posted 2001-05-20 11:59 PM

oh, i like this one. i know the feelings that you speak of.well anyways good job on the poem.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-05-21 11:09 AM

Hey I really liked this one. The ending had a strong impact on me. I thought you wrote this quite well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

4 posted 2001-05-21 01:07 PM

you put incredible emotion in this piece, i really like it a lot. the last line especially gave this a profound imapact. wonderful writing, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

5 posted 2001-05-21 09:30 PM

powerful emotion stirer......

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-06-05 03:50 PM

beautifully expressed feelings and emotions. keep it up and keep sharing

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xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-06-10 11:33 AM

Good job!!! I liked this

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