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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
the first 4 or 5 poems i am posting are a little different from what i usually write so i don't think they are very good, but judge for yourselves....and also i usually don't rymthe(spelling) and attempt to keep the same beats in each line..... I wear a suit in your filthy neighborhood I'd piss on myself if i could I fantasize about your wealthy women You know, the ones in the street and in the pen... I'd love myself, though, if i could I know that nothing's really alive He who swallows is he who dive's I know that the ugliest part of you Has most likely decayed and become true I speak a classy native tongue But i can't understand why i hear the war drum I dive into an ocean of uppers and downs But when i come out, it seems i've finally drowned I know that nothing's really alive He who follows is he who dive's I know that the sweetest part of you Was most likely swallowed to start anew |
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litle_krazy_poet Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 71 |
i liked this poem. when you say: I know that the ugliest part of you Has most likely decayed and become true it seems like that your talking about someone that you like and is cerupted well i hope thing work out for you somethings need poems and then there are thoes that are just for fun |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Hmmm this is quite an exceptional poem. The words you have used are simple yet they create such imaginary. I hope that this person can come out of this situation and back to what they once were. It is just so powerful. Wonderful anomaly, wonderful. ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here anomaly! I liked this one tons!! very good, very original. I can always count on you with an exceptional post!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Utter greatness!!! What else is there to say. Great imagery maybe?? Loved the flow. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very intruiging!!! it definitely feeds into my curiosity i just sense so much hate, maybe i'm wrong no matter what, great post I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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