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broken wing
Junior Member

since 2001-04-30

Posts 37

0 posted 2001-05-19 09:32 PM

i dont know what to do anymore
i cant even talk to you
everytime im with you
its like im walking on egg shells
waiting for you to crack
and lose it all
im so afraid that ill do something wrong
so afraid that ill say something wrong
to bring you closer to the brink

i dont know what to do anymore
we dont even talk to each other
theres a lack of communication
and i dont know whos fault it is
i tried the best i could
but im so afraid to continue this way
so afraid that i wont know what to do
to help you when you crack
and lose it all

"To me, fair friend, u never can be old,
For as u were when first ur eye I eyed,
Such seems ur beauty still." ~W.S.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-20 04:34 AM

great job on the poem...what u were trying say in the poem...was said strongly...keep writing...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-05-20 01:12 PM

I liked what you said about the egg shells. Very well thought out, I liked it a lot.
The poem showed a lot of care because you want to be friends with this person and help him/her out. The communication lack is not ONE person's fault, it usually is both unless ONE person completely shuts out. Anyhow, try....try to talk....good luck.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-05-20 03:50 PM

it sounds like a hard situation, i hope everything turns out for the best.if there is a lack of communication i would actually consider giving them this poem, you seem very honest and forthright in this and it might help thngs a bit. just a thought, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2001-05-21 10:30 PM

Gosh do i know you how you feel..im in the same exact situation...but just dont think its ur fault..if that person cracks dont let them believe or yourself believe you pushed them to the limit...ok hun?? ::hugs::

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-05-22 06:35 PM

Egg shells are great as a metaphor, as Javier said. They really bring a lot of things to mind, it makes the reader think of other things that they would relate to eggshells and I think that you thought that out extremely well.
As for the situation, you know what I think.

Have some pride, talk to him about it. If you feel there's no communication, either make communication or at least bring closure.
The choice is yours. Nice poem though.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

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