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Teen Poetry #4

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joycerogers
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since 2001-05-16

Posts 83
Texas

0 posted 2001-05-19 03:33 PM

After the stars come out
Before the dawn begins,
Uncalled evil, a familiar face, quietly slips in.
Silenced are my pains...covering his addiction.
Even though my night reveals,
Day can not see my affliction.

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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-05-19 05:30 PM

Very well done.....the acrostic rocked. I really thought you did well on it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

2 posted 2001-05-19 07:30 PM

I really liked the way that you wrote this. Great job!

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-05-20 03:09 PM

acrostic is hard to do, but you wrote this quite well. the piece made me shiver, very powerful poem here. keep sharing your work with us.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-05-21 01:41 AM

acrostic!! a well done one...great job...this was quite powerful...i enjoyed the read...but hope things are alright for u...

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if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

5 posted 2001-05-26 10:45 AM

This was very well written...and the acrostic added a nice effect. Good job hun

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