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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723
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To someone who is very special to me. Enjoy You an me When the stars are out And shinning so bright Daydreaming on a Cloudless summer night When the sun rises On a new spring day And the fresh-air breeze Is blowing my way When things can't go wrong When love's in the air When joy fills a room When life's more than fair I see visions of you You're visioning me But still reality Is too blind to see That you and me Are meant to be [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 05-19-2001).] |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This is a little sketchy but i really like your overall themes and phrasing. I also have the Mundy song "You and Me" in my head now. Nice work! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This is so beautiful Jay, I just HAD to reply to it. So sad how "reality" sometimes keeps apart the people that are meant to be together. But it will work out in the end for you, I'm sure of it.  *hugs* Jenn "If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i liked the couplete at the end and the feeling that you put into this piece. you did a good job with this, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is really wonderful!  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I wonder who it's about! Well done Jason, I enjoyed this. A love poem....geesh....what's going on?! You can't be falling for somebody can you? NOooo *dives in slow motion*  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
me too, I was wondering too be honest? I lvoed it, it was easy to read and easy to understand. It didn't give me a brain cramp, so that's good. keep it up hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michel |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
I liked the poem man it really rocked. in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN) |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Aww I loved how you put all the wonderful things of nature and life happening during the time you were with this special person...beautiful Sounds like truely someone wonderful |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Well Done I really enjoyed the read, this is truly wonderful. Zu "Death solves all problems, no man, no problem" J.V.Stalin 1918. |
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