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Hidden Junior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 18Lost in my own world |
Without Him They took him away But that's not all With him went me Who I am And what I could be There went my heart And my laughter too They had no idea Didn't know what it would do. **One of the most adventurous things left for us is to go to sleep. For no one can lay a hand on our dreams.** |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this is a sad situation...something i assume you couldnt control...i hope things get better or are better soon...and the poem itself showed your pain and i saw it...keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Ok, I need to know exactly what's going on here. Sorry if I'm being nosy  It's just that I'm trying to make sense on why they took who? All in all though, you did a good job in writing the poem. keep it up"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
you captured a feeling of sadness with your words, but i was a little lost as to what is really going on in this. still pretty well written though, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Sounds sad to me. I hope all gets well sooN! As for the poem, i thought it was full of emotion. Well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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