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anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

0 posted 2001-05-18 11:13 AM

Blackened eyes still reeking of a fear,
That make the bloodied cuts still so severe.
Trickling hope down an open pipe drain,
A joy of life too hard to maintain.
Trembling hands nurse a purple thin face,
A lifetime of pain too hard to erase.
Silence filled the room like a deadly mist,
The warmth of sleep too hard to resist.

The single sound of an angels scream,
Pierce the walls of a perfect dream.

Solitary drops of salt disappear,
Twinges of sadness still persevere.
For the exits are locked in this domain,
Orders of chaos and horror do reign.
Blood drops and life losing this race,
Sucking her existence without a trace.
Slumber a heaven where punches are missed,
Deaths determination saw him persist.

Reddy water flows like a stream
Echo's the nightmare and not the dream.

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

[This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 05-18-2001).]

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2001-05-18 11:15 AM

This was beautifully written..very nice read. Thanks for sharing

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

2 posted 2001-05-18 11:26 AM

Beautiful work. I liked this.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

Heaven
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 8

3 posted 2001-05-18 12:37 PM

Hey that was great. i hope to read more of your work, and i hope you will read mine. i should have some on here soon!

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-05-18 12:49 PM

beautiful wonderful awesome amazing poem..hehe...buy hey thats what i felt...and yea...this showed so much as i read every line by my heart...this poem...i loved it!

...thnaks for sharing eJ cya~...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-18-2001).]

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

5 posted 2001-05-18 05:22 PM

beautiful writing, the first two lines in italics made me shiver. well the whole first stanza did that but i especially liked the lines in italics

keep posting all your work

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-05-19 03:20 PM

Very well done! Very very well done liz! I loved this poem. You write so awesome. Great job on this.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

7 posted 2001-05-21 03:06 AM

*bump*

hehe...cuz...
this was a beautiful wonderful awesome amazing poem!!
need i say more ?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-21-2001).]

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