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Letting go
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Letting go |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
I stand on the side of the road watching the trucks roll by A cloud of smoke surrounds me, and to move... I don't even try. I stand there, lost in thought, simply staring off into space Remembering all the memories of us I just can't seem to erase. The times where you wrapped your arms around me squeezing me so tight, And those times where everything fell into place and seemed to be quite right. The sweet kisses on my neck, seems like they are still there, And when it came time for you to leave, I thought I couldn't bear. But now all those are fading away just like the cloud of dirt, I know that I should just let them go, but I can't, because it will hurt. aight, on a side note, i am the type of person that doens't let things go easily *L* i dont' go down without a fight, i'm first to voice my opinion and i am the last to let old feelings go... and let old flames die. Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you |
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Rach813 Junior Member
since 2001-04-17
Posts 30Maine |
Val hun this is another one of your great poems! I think I can tell who this one is about LOL  hey you know I am here for you through whatever because I know you are there for me LOL...Keep up the great writing you know I love your poems! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the imagery was real and i liked what you were saying in this...very good job on the poem...thanks for the read...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
oooh I like this and you KNOW I can relate... it must be a Sagittarean trait, wouldn't you say? *curses the sign she was born under* DAMN HALF-MAN HALF-HORSE THING!!!!  ,Sara "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Heh, Sagittarians are awesome. Don't diss 'em.  I like this poem, it read through like something you would hear in a small poetry club where all those snobby poet people sit on the stools and sip water, and then read a poem. Heh... kinda like PIP would be if it was IRL.  Nice work! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
allan, what in the world are you talking about? i really like the images in this, they were very real as albert says. you did a wonderful job on this, keep posting all your work.Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought you did well on this one. It wasn't my favorite though.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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