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Hidden Junior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 18Lost in my own world |
Clown I feel like a clown Acting all the time See the painted on smile It's not real I'm not really happy It's all an act I'm made to put on To fool the world Make them think and assume Nothing is wrong But it's all a lie Everything's wrong I lost everything And I'm supposed to be happy I don't think so I just can't do it I'm all alone Torn and crying You don't see it You think I'm ok You don't wanna know It's all an act I portray But no nevermind I don't need your help I can't help it's your fault You're a blind fool Or maybe we both are Both blind fools I know you need me Maybe I need you too. **People who put themselves down are really pleading for someone else to pick them up and show them the way.** [This message has been edited by Hidden (edited 05-18-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Now THIS I like! This affected me very deeply on an emotional level. Everything you have written here is what I have to tell myself every morning. The bit that really caught my eye was that the line about you having lost everything. That I know all about. Keep your head up though. If this person needs you as much as you think you need them, you'll pull through. Smile.  ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
one day, oh one day, I'll be able to check the box that says "Add thread to library"...  Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome! Please check your email for a special greeting! SEA |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I really liked this. Great job. I like your quote too. *~*Amanda*~* |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Welcome to passions great first post hope to see more of your work soon. Zu |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This is great; i sympathize with your feelings so much. Wonderful first post...keep it up! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
welcome to passions. love the poem so much love peace and eyeliner angel -x- Each Moment in time is a pinprick in eternity-Marcus Aurilius |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this is such a emotional poem...i loved this piece cuz i go through this everyday and you have putted it so well...deep yet sincere...hope to see more...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
It's too bad that you feel this way about yourself, if this IS about you. The afterthought provokes a piece of advice from me.... sometimes it isn't the best way to get a pick-me-up, constantly putting yourself down. I think you should try to bring others up, and not only might that also make you feel better about yourself for helping someone out, but they just might begin returning the favour. Once you can learn to love yourself again, your life will be something of a breeze. Take it from me. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
you really poured yourself into your words in this piece, this is beautiful writing. i look forward to reading lots more from you, you are a talented writer. keep posting all your work Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
::applauds::....Well well...excellent job here!! I got soooo into the poem...amazing job!!! |
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Heaven New Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 8 |
hey, i worte a poem with this same idea. i will put it on here soo for you guys to read. i really like the way you wrote this! good job. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! I enjoyed this poem highly. The message in the poem is so true you have no idea. Well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Hidden Junior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 18Lost in my own world |
Thanks everyone! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome, Hidden. I know you're going to like it here. I really enjoyed reading this piece. It's going into my library... these are beautiful words, written with such emotion that it's impressive. It's sad that you feel this way. You seem so unhappy. I guess in this case the true way to happiness is opening up and showing someone who you really are inside. You'd be surprised at what might happen. Very beautiful poem. I can't wait to read more. --Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i just felted like replying again...this poem has been read over and hit me more then first time...deep in my heart...a piece i loved ..bye  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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