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anonymous albert ?
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0 posted 2001-05-11 01:16 AM


ok?...this was a idea jeff came up with...couple of days ago...about we doin' a collaboratin'...so i was like..."sure, why not?"... i thought it would be interestin' too... so couple of days later...this is what came out with...enjoy..


"one day at a time"

countless tears of sorrow,
endless cries of hate,

never knowing the way it had to be,
this is my dying fate,
which has come all to soon,
and will never fade away

this is what my life is like
every single day


restless struggles with pain,
worthless breath in survival,
never to rest for some peace,
this from birth was my arrival,
cause all has been lived was only misery,
with nothing being led my way


this is what my life is like
every single day


as i'm all alone,
where i try holding on, to still carry on,
as i'll be taking it...

one
               day
                               at
                                               a
                                                            time.


May.10(collaboration w/ Jeff Baker)

hope you guys liked it...cya~... ...?



if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"



[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-11-2001).]

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Xeonox
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1 posted 2001-05-11 01:19 AM


I really liked it. Both parts. THank you for letting just read it.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

Lakewalker
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2 posted 2001-05-11 08:57 AM


Great collaboration, it worked very well.  You guys should do some more together  

oh yeah,
Congratulations on 1000


"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

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3 posted 2001-05-11 09:17 AM


Wow great collaberation guys congratulations  

Congratulations to you albert on reching 1000

" The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson

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4 posted 2001-05-11 09:33 AM


First of all, Congratulations on 1000 replies
Secondly, this was a well written poem.  You both did really good.  I do hope you start looking at life in a different perspective though.  There's a lot of good out there  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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5 posted 2001-05-11 11:21 AM


CONGRATS ON DA 1000  

i liked this muchs! yall should work togethers more often  
tiff


“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

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6 posted 2001-05-11 11:44 AM


Nice work.....and congrats on 1000 Albert! Man, you're fast.  
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7 posted 2001-05-11 11:54 AM


congrats on 1000 albert, this is a really awsome display of both of your talent.  you got to 1000 really quickly and i have really appreciated the fact that you read and reply to everyone's work in here, it does not go unnoticed    your an awsome guy albert and i'll be here when you hit 2000 too  

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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8 posted 2001-05-11 11:55 AM


hee hee, we seem to be in the habit of responding to each other more that once.  i forgot to add this to my library, so now i will

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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9 posted 2001-05-11 12:17 PM


congrats and good job!
broken

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10 posted 2001-05-11 02:54 PM


Hurrrayyyy Quark!   This was awesome dudes. Great to see you guys workin togetha... Kick booty.
  ~Carly

"Your joy is your sorrow unmasked.  And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears."   ~Kahil Gibran

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11 posted 2001-05-11 06:25 PM


Finally a collaboration that I'm not a half of.     Hehe....
I think you guys did an excellent job!  You two work very well together, I like the repitition of "This is what my life is like, every single day."  This was a very powerful line, I really like the whole poem...... marvelous work you two.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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12 posted 2001-05-11 11:47 PM


Allan, get over yourself.  

Albertia and Jeff, well done. Congratulations on your 1000th post, Albertia.  

You already know my feelings on this. Once again, well done on a good piece.

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

CwboyAtHeart
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13 posted 2001-05-12 12:31 PM


Very cool poem, guys.  I really liked it.  And awesome that you reached 1000!  Keep 'em comin, I love to read your stuff.

      - Cody -

Living From Memories
Living From Thoughts
There Are Some Things In Live
That Cannot Be Taught

katherine
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14 posted 2001-05-12 10:18 PM


dude this is awesome!! I love it. it works so well. well done.
congrats on the 1000!!!!
katie

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15 posted 2001-05-12 11:18 PM


very good job. you two work well together. agian good job on the poem. and congrats on the 1000

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

I've learned that even when you

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16 posted 2001-05-16 07:49 PM


Wow i so loved the ending. This was great but the ending was what really hit me hard. Well done!  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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17 posted 2001-05-16 08:42 PM


This is a wonderful piece! You two have done a great job portraying your emotions in this piece. It really touched me, and, as Javier said, the last line is very powerful. Congrats on 1000!

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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18 posted 2001-05-16 09:06 PM


wow, that is really really really really really really really good!!!!!! you two should do more together!!
*s*
Stace

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19 posted 2001-05-16 09:17 PM


wow...i really like this alot! you guys make an awsome team...i luv the idea   i wanna see some more by you guys!
           *KiMMiE*

corey14
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20 posted 2001-05-23 11:42 PM


this was very cool...i really liked it..good job jeff and alby
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21 posted 2001-05-24 12:59 PM


Congrats
i loved the poem

cherish
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22 posted 2001-05-24 10:11 PM


*smacks the side of her head for missing this post*

wow...i loved the collaboration...and i gotta agree with dopey here..the ending was great..well done to you both jeff and ablerta!!!!

CONGRATULATIONS ALBERTA!!!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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23 posted 2001-06-16 02:21 PM


Wow, Albert and Jeff!  You two make an awesome team.  This poem is so beautiful.  Extremely well written.  Nice work!  You two rock!

--Marie

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Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection.  Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

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