Teen Poetry #4 |
Letting Go (First Love) |
iLLCN New Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 1 |
A man once said, gazzing into someones eyes is like retracking thier entire life story. "Where dey`ve gone. Where dey've been" (Forest Gump) A man once said, your luckey if you live a life and you find ONE "real" friend. A person that will go out of thier way for you. A person that appreaciates what you do for them and a person that is thier for you. Where are all these people I ask myself? I've met four so far and I know I can trust ONE with my life, well I thought I could til`. --- A first love isnt one forgotten, Not harsh, Nor Rotten. My baby! With the touch of cotten. I gave you my all, My life, My time, My attention, Every weekend we'de release tension, Not to mention, Alot of frustration. I threw my life away for you, My school, My work, My family, I always put you first, Me losing trust in you makes me burst. On top of my dresser droor, Even on the floor, Hardcore, When I was with you I had no gore, Now I know, I could never be happy with a whore. --- I gave it my all. I dont see anyother way I could release my feelings but to broadcast them. Love is not jellousy, nor possesivness, Its just the high times you share, To forget all this and the rest of this. People tell me trust is the most important thing in a relationship but I disagree. Sure she cheated on me, but you know what! "Ex-Girl To The Next Girl" (Gangstarr) - J1GGZ OUT! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
interesting as i take it that you put other peoples thoughts or lyrics or maybe quotes..ahhhh ...anyways...welcome wecole to apssions this was anice first post...i thought yoiu did quite well...keep writing,posting,replying...cya~... ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
These thoughts are so jagged and that is what makes this piece so unique. Finding words that don't go with the rest of the piece but without them would make it sound weird is great! I truly love this piece. You've made a splash into Passions. Welcome! ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! I enjoyed the poem and hope to see more! Check your mail for a special message! Dopey/Mod I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
welcome to passions. great first post. I loved it love peace and eyeliner angel -x- |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I did like this, especially the ending. "J1GGZ OUT!" Wow. Sheer brilliance. j/k Welcome to Passions in Poetry. If these were separate poems, you might find you get more personal reactions to each one if you post them as separate threads. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Welcome to Passions!! this is a really unique first post, i liked it a lot. i think you'll like it here with all us crazy people, i hope you stick around for a long time. i lookf forward to reading more from you, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Welcome welcome Welcome!!! Whoa...what an amazing entrance into passions...The format was amazing and you explained a lil before you even started the poem which i think was fabulous!!!! I cant wait to see more of your poetry so please, keep those poems coming!!! Welcome again!! |
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Rydr16 New Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 5 |
very nice poem mikey, so, ex girl to the next girl huh my poems better! =) love ya babes love, ur sexy gurl |
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Rydr16 New Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 5 |
Oh-ya, and next time we take sum time off, you better not post a poem like this again cuz u know ur ex gurl to the next gurl aint happening, cuz we aint never breakin' up happy 7 months sweetheart,,LOVEYOU -dee |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome to Passions! Interesting first post. I can't wait to read more. Thanks for sharing! --Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares. |
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