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In My Dreams |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I saw you last night, With tears in my eyes. Wondering how you could do such a thing, As make me cry. Screaming and yelling, With absolutely no impact. I think i've lost you now... I'll never get you back. You were going with her, Thought i'd understand. That this invisible girl, Was taking away my man. All i could think, Is how could this be? How could u go with her, And without a second thought abandon me? Tears were in motion, Felt my heart break in two. Realizing this was happening, And not a thing i could do. Held my teddy bear close, All to real to me. Opened my eyes, And realized it was only a dream. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is the kind of dream you wake up from and say thank goodness!!  SEA |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great Poem, well done i've never thought about writing about a dream but I think I might... thanx for inspiring me. Marshal Zu |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
That was awesome. I totally forgot about the title so I thought all this was true. It was sad and then BAM, it's only a dream. Very cool poem. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
great ending, i didn't see that one coming at all. wonderful job on this, you really wrote this beautifully. keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Aww thanks everyone!!! And Im so glad i inspired u marsh |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this one. Well done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Raven Skye Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 112.In a House. |
aww...that was really good. I'm going thru pretty much the same thing lately except it isn't a dream...  good job though!!*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×* |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
lol whoa i was reading this and at first i was like OOOO im gonna kill him! then i get to the end..SHEW dont scare me like that grl!! lol **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Shugar~ This was great!!! You made it so picture pefect...It was like I could just imagine what you were going through...Great job...Keep it up!!! "If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
awesome poem...i loved the whol;e poem throughout and the ending was just amazing...great job on this poem...thanks for sharing it michele .....  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
What a nightmare. I'm glad it's only a dream though. ~*hugs*~ you'll be ok  I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!! |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Great poem like usual keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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