Teen Poetry #4 |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
You're sitting next to me But your mind is miles away Your attentions not on me, Or anything I say I'm telling you my feelings, And just how much I care, But it doesn't even phase you, It's like you're not even there. Why do I waste my time? It's not worth the heartache, Despite how I'll avoid it, My lonely heart will break. I thought that you were different, And that you'd understand, But I've come to the conclusion, No one ever can. If you live to be 100 years old, I want to live to be 101 so I never have to live a day without you. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Another great poem britt, I really enjoyed it well done... keep on sharing Mr mr Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is really nice, but don't say no one ever can understand you. You have to know that's not trur, if it were, my reply would be " What the heck are you talking about?" Keep your head up, the poem's nice. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
Thanx for your replies. It makes me feel really great about doing something I love. And about no one understanding me Jon, maybe some people do, I just don't see it. Thanx again guys. ~britt~ If you live to be 100 years old, I want to live to be 101 so I never have to live a day without you. |
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*~valeria~* Junior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 10East Haddam, CT |
hey britt i think that this is a good poem but you should most definitely not think that no none listens |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Hi sweetie I'm glad that you're finally posting your poems!! However, I want you to know that I am ALWAYS here to listen and I think you know that..I dont care if it's 3:00 in the morning and you need 2 talk 2 someone, give me a call you know I'll be there whenever you need me. We need 2 have one of our "talks" like I told you before, so ya better find time for me in your schedule sometime soon!! I love ya! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
hey...hope everythings alright...this is a sad situation...and the poem showed so much...keep writing... if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
hey britt...im with nikki..i love you too!!!! and same here..u can call me whenever if ya need to talk!!! good job hun! *KiMMiE* you guys i have lotsa ppl on piptalk i know!!!! lol! |
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chas Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 101Lynn, ma |
great poem, the title should be the name of the person you are talking about, if there is someone. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i really like the way you ended this, very powerful writing. if i had to make a suggestion at a title (since you asked) it would be "a million miles from understanding" but then again, i'm a dork anyway, good job and keep posting Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
I can DEFINATELY relate.... relationships are heaven one day, hell the next... it's awful *L* nice work , Suga "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Wow, good job. I can totally relate, and that's not a fun thing to relate to. Just remember that there are people out there who know what you're goin through. Anyway, good poem, it's going to my library. - Cody - |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done on this one, but do not give up hope! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
The instant you start thinking that no one will ever understand where you are coming from is the instant the world becomes a very dark and lonely place. Keep your head up. ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
seems like we got a group of Conn girlies now too besides that........ Youve sxpressed your emotions truly, and... I think you should listen to your friends ~*hugs*~ "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very good job on the poem. The scheme was simple, but you pulled it off, and made it sound and read through outstandingly. This is difficult to do, kudos to you. As for the situation, I agree with AF. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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