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Pain and Time
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Pain and Time |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Time, unlike pain, Fades away Slowly, Day by day The time we spend, Trying To dull the pain Is wasted Used up in vain alright this was I believe my very first "poem" ever even if it's not THE first one it's one of the first and it has spawned all the rest of my work big and small great and not so great. Enjoy... >¶Øʆ< |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
and not bad, actually |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
A nice poem poet.  I love to read first works. They give so much information about the writer and where they have come from. It's a great "first" poem.~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yes... it does seem like it would be one of your first. Not because it is bad, far from it. But our first poems do tend to be something general, like contrasts between two things.... Like Pain and Time... I really did like it. Good job, p.o.a. Nice to see where you are coming from. -Allan |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Haha... my first poem royaly sucked I guess.. tons of cliche statements and such... great job p.o.a. cant wait to read more interesting work... ~JDR "Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one acid. Pretty darn good for a first poem.........mine was about football. Considering that was all that mattered in my life when I was in 7th grade.....yea. It sucks though.....hehe  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
One thing is for sure, I'd never show you guys my very first poem --- if you could even call it a poem at that Your first poem obviously is very short, but It already shows a lot of meaning to it. great post I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Thanx for taking the time to read my poem and telling me what ya think. >¶Øʆ< |
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