Teen Poetry #4 |
Because of you |
dramaqueen22086 Member
since 2001-05-05
Posts 50Hadlyme, CT |
hey ppl. i wrote this for my mommy, it's mother's day. happy mommy day. ~!kellie!~ Because of you I’m thoughtful, Understanding and kind Because of you I’m caring, And never late for time Because your smile makes me happy, When I’m feeling down Because your smile gives me joy, I never have a frown Because of me I make you mad, When I’m having a bad day Because of you, My problems just seem to fade away Because of you I try to say I love you, In words more than one Because of you I’m thankful, For all that you have done |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
awww kellie your mommy will luv it...tell her i said happy moms day k? *KiMMiE* |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful Mother's day tribute! The emotions you give us are beautifully expressed.. the only thing is that your metimic scheme needs a little work. You would be surprised how much it can improve a work. The emotions are all there, though, and thats all that matters. Thanks for sharing. "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wonderful tribute to your mother. If I was a mother I'd want this tribute. SO sweet, and so well done. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Rach813 Junior Member
since 2001-04-17
Posts 30Maine |
This is a really good poem about your mom...I bet she loved it! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great work on a mothers' day poem! I'm sure she loved it, you did a great job of expressing your appreciation for your mother. Very nice poem! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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