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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
Looking into your eyes Searching deep within your soul Wishing to see that sparkle in your eyes once more Hoping to find our souls still united The sparkle that once danced in your eyes is dead Finding no bridge to your soul not even a thread I cry in your arms Holding tight Not wanting to believe But forced to It’s over I must let go Losing apart of me here with you As we walk our separate ways You said you would love me forever But here we are wishing never to cross paths again We couldn’t love each other anymore No matter how much we wanted to Our love had faded forever gone Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
awesome detailed writing of your emotions and situation you were discribing..i felt it...great job and...keep writing..kat  ..cya~...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
awwws thats sayads  but great writtins  good jobs! and hope everything bes okays with yous! tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
i really liked this, i thought it was good. keep writing, ~ab~ *~"Sometimes I wish I was a little girl again--because bruised knees heal faster than broken hearts."~* |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I liked this one. It wasnt the best I have read from you, to be honest, but if a poem this good isnt your best, then you must be a good writer huh? *~*Amanda*~* |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
the alternating line sizes worked really well in this piece, the format of this is very cool. you did a wonderful job on this, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I love the alteration in couplet size here... that made a unique flow.  Very nice work. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You did quite well with this, yet it was very sad. I hope you get well soon.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was so sad...::hugs:: |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Such an emotional piece you've done well my friend keep it up ~*hugs*~ "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This is so sad. The complexity of emotion you've expressed is quite well written. Keep posting! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
a very sad poem hun but i understand wut your feeling its cool hun no worries ok if ya ever need to talk ya know my aim name *heh at the silly rhyme* anywho you rock hun love ya *hugs* ben i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it |
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