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Losing Love
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Losing Love |
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HappyPretender Junior Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 38Prince George, VA |
Losing Love Everyone watches Watches my tears fall They all know They can do nothing at all So many I've hurt Many I've made cry Funny thing is I don't know why Why I've done all this Why they cry I guess it was all Just for one try Try to hold on Try to save The one thing I was proud I made That one thing Was our love I gave everything But it's not enough For I messed up Lost everything Lost the thing most important I was trying to save But I'll always remember The love we gave. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Nice work... I like the flow, and the last line. Keep posting for us.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
definitly the last line was great...i liked the poem..throughtout...keep writing...  ...? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is a good poem I appreciate you sharing it keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I liked this. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed it. Not your best, but still a good read.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I really liked this one...good job and keep it up!! |
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