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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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ok everyone. heres the thing i wrote this upon the request of a friend. she wants to aske her b/f to prom with this (if you want the whole story i posted something in the teen chat). i think it sucks i'm not sure if i'm even done yet. well here it is Special words For one I love Together we have been For eight wonderful months This time with you is precious But this I know you see Powers great have put us together I know we will be, through any kind of weather Every time you near I forget all my fears Lost in your gaze I find my way My darling, my dear Know that I always want you here Our hearts beat Upon the same note So many days and nights We have spent together All we need now is just be So tell me now Will you go to Prom with me? It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is quite romantic... if you want it to look more professional (this is just for looks primarily) then make it into four-line stanzas instead of couplets, with the last line at the end. Sound good? Other than that I like the poem, it's simple and would serve it's purpose.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
thanks alot for the reply and the advice on how to make it look better. i'll have to make to copies to see which one she would rather use.thanks again It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this was anice and sweet poem..i think you did a really good job on expressing your feelings in here...great tribute to the prom and hope she likes it as i did(dont take it in adifferent way tho  ...haha...keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
this is really sweet, i hope you give this poem to however you wrote it for. you did a great job on this, keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You did a good job Did she like it enough to give to her man? I believe you should make it long stanza, and that's it "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Yes.she did like it and is going to use it to ask her b/f to prom. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You have to ask your gf/bf to prom? I thought it was a gimme......anyway nicely done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
No,dopey. i'm not askin anyone to prom. the only one i would want to go withis my ex-gf. so i am going alone. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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