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Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

0 posted 2001-05-09 09:33 PM

Smeared mascara stain her cheeks
as the tears pour from her eyes
she knows the time has come
to say her last good-bye
6 bittersweet years she spent in this town
she smiled and laughed ,cried and frowned
made memories that will last a lifetime
letting go and leaving it all behind
it's hard to pretend she's doing fine
She fell so deeply into love
and got her heart torn to bits
she carefully put it back together
and is ready to take another hit
she made so many friends,and few enemies
in this town that brought her joy and sorrow
she knows she'll be far away tomorrow
she stares out the window as her life fades to a backdrop behind her
theres nothing left to do but wave good-bye
and turn her heart around to her new life ahead........

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

1 posted 2001-05-09 10:43 PM

wow...this one brought some memories back to me! (but i've never lived anywhere 6yrs) it did what great poems do...made me FEEL! good job!

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-05-10 12:07 PM

I like "turn her heart around." Very interesting choice of words, as in the rest of the poem.
Nice work, I did enjoy this poem quite a bit.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-05-10 03:18 AM

great job and i liked the way you have wrote this poem...keep writing...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

4 posted 2001-05-10 10:46 AM

i've moved quite a few times in my life and this poem really brought back some ancient memories. i liked this a lot, the feeling was great throughout. keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

5 posted 2001-05-10 07:23 PM

Aww. Its so sad. I know what its like to leave people, but I guess everyone does. This was a beautiful poem though.

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow. I feel kinda sorry for it...

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

6 posted 2001-05-10 07:52 PM

i thought i replied to this one..but anyways..i like it!  its cute
            *KiMMiE*
grr @ these stupid banners that SUMONE put on this page  lol

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-05-12 11:47 PM

This is a duplicate post, so please refer to the other thread to reply. /pip/Forum45/HTML/002372.html

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

[This message has been edited by acire (edited 05-12-2001).]

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