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Connected at the Feet |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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you are always there when i run to the light you are licking at my feet you are always there when i've my back to the light i can see you most clearly you are always there even in the dark of night where you fall into all you are always there ever since my day of birth i shall see you always you are always there connected at the feet we are i shan't turn my back on you you are always there with narcissistic glee i gaze forever into you you are always here my every shape and being you are with my back to the light... i shall provide you company the light is not my form my form is only you |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is a really harmonious poem Allan. I am in a bit of shock that no one had replied to it!!! Its funny I never actually thought about my shadow like that. A nice ode all the same. As per usual, great work.  ~AF~ "Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment." Buddha |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Funny storry, I realized he was tlaking about a shadow only by the last stanza... oh well I'm a publock skool studnont |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here.......  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Nice to see you scaled up in your poems... I have to say that "the light is not my form my form is only you" that was the best part of the poem and concluded with it made this poem all the better keep searching for that light... it will construct beautiful poems.. ~JDR "Is it love in my gut, or piss in my bladder?" -Allan Riverwood |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Very nice. In the first stanza, I thought you were talking about a dog. hehehe But then I caught on. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
LOL! I though you were talking about a dog too.... I like this though. GoOd JoB! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I've never thought that about my shadow I guess that's a good way of looking at it great post I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
What would this world be without shadows? I don't know. Not but seriously this is a very good piece. I will admit I didn't know what you were talking about until the 4th stanza, though. ( I was thinking dog too  ) But any ways... Good job~Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
wow, we got ourselves a thinker here folks. Most people are more concerned with the light than the effects of it...nice little poem about your shadow allan. >¶Øʆ< |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
wonderful poem Allan!! |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
My.. My.. Now tell me how could I have passed this one up? Wonderfully said here *Allan*!!! I would like to Congratulate you on finding your new best friend, the image of yourself. ~Amanda~ |
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