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broken wing Junior Member
since 2001-04-30
Posts 37 |
do you think your the only one? the only one that hurts get over yourself hurting comes with life you come to me with your problems can i come to you with mine? o wait, nevermind i forgot your the only one with problems im always there for you are you there for me? oops my bad your the only one with problems you think your the only one the only one with problems get over it i have problems too "The sun in your eyes made some of the lies worth believing." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
ok... in the first part it seemed like negative..but as the end came it showed something very real.. and i liked that....keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-08-2001).] |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
preach it! amen! |
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broken wing Junior Member
since 2001-04-30
Posts 37 |
i disagree. when i said this: you come to me with your problems can i come to you with mine? it means that the person(s) comes to me with their problems because im their friend, but whenever i try to come to them with mine they arent there for me. thats what this poem is talking about. im not meaning that this person cant come to me any longer because of this. im still their friend. they just arent there for me when/if i need them. lol you snuck in and edited on me albert. im gonna keep this up though in case anybody else misunderstands. broken "The sun in your eyes made some of the lies worth believing." [This message has been edited by broken wing (edited 05-08-2001).] |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
i really dislike those kinda peeps...sum of my *friends* used to be like that..but is all good now...feel better  *KiMMiE* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
no lol..i read it over and i thought this wasnt the point i really meant..i did think this was kinda shows the reader taht the poet is concerned with his own affairs that was my first immpression and dont be saying it like that?..and i edited right after i posted w/out even knowing your words...  ..so..yea! and the first reply implys to my second impression...so think whatever you want cuz i dont really have time for this......?[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-08-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I see what you are saying here... you penned it quite well, good job. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
True friends should be able to talk as well as listen. And I know from first hand experience that when the listening part is missing, it kinda sucks. Maybe you should tell this person that you need 4 them 2 listen, because maybe they don't realize their errors? I like this poem though. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i have felt this way in a lot of friendships i've had and it is always hard to be the one to have to carry all the weight. i hope you have someone to talk to about things because a sitation like this can really weigh you down after a while. you wrote this very well, great job on this piece. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I guess this person is not a true friend. it should go both ways, and if doesn't i suggest you go look for a another friend. "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
there are too many people like that in the world..im shur i've been like that before..i think you just kinda have to express to the person what your feeling and they'll change it...but thats from my own experience..hope your friends become truer |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I loved it, and I can really relate. I've had plenty of friends like that, lol. hope things get better for you. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Don't we all? Nicely done. I liked the poem. way to vent.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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