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broken wing Junior Member
since 2001-04-30
Posts 37 |
you fail to see the pain in my eyes you fail to see the sorrow my heart is breaking into pieces and yet you dont even know its really all my fault i hide it all to well you dont even know the real me you dont even know me im full of secrets that you dont know you dont even really care i die inside everyday but nobody really knows i hide my pain and sorrow i hide my true feelings i hide the real me but nobody really knows you fail to see the pain in my eyes you fail to see the sorrow you fail to see the real me and yet you dont even know "The sun in your eyes made some of the lies worth believing." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this poem is something i can totally relate to in my life as you can see from my other poem it is very similar in meaning..i really enjoyed the read..thanks for sharing and keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great work! I like this poem quite a bit, one of the better ones that I have seen from you! Can't wait to see more.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
great work on this one...i know i can totally relate! and i luv readin poems i can relate to,...gives them more true emotions... *KiMMiE* |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I can relate to you on this subject alot. It's sad, but the poem is well-written. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
this is one of my favorites from you, it had that extra bit of power and punch to it. this was a really heartfelt piece, keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This is so good...i loved this one!!! Good job hun |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Seems like everyone do get thru the same situations in life. Awesome read, you've expressed yourself really well. Thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I really enjoyed this one. You expressed your emotions nicely in the one. Keep posting! |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This has a really neat lyrical quality to it. I also love your user name -- am i right about the "and with a broken wing, she still sings" of it? "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wonderful job on the poem. I really liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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