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All we have to be |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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All black and white, Never gray. Hang on tight, Cannot stray. I admit defeat, Crumpled and bare. Left with this heat, Passion? Just couldn't dare. I've learned I feel, All consuming need. Now so hard to deal, Having planted the seed. Yes, you want me, Cannot live so empty. Time for you to see, All it is we have to be. "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 05-08-2001).] |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I love the last line Jenn. Very interesting and beautiful poem... keep em coming Jason ps thanks for the IM... hehe |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Awwww anything for you Jay. Thanks for the reply. Your opinion means a lot to me.  ~Jenn "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great job on the poem..i liked it throughout..and i'm gald you posting poems..in awhile even tho..you posted like couple of days ago..and guess someones getting some love huh?  and im? what about me  .. but..yea..and keep writing cya~ jenn ...?[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-08-2001).] |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
*sigh* No... no love. Yeah... I im you Albert!!!lol "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Jenn! Nice job on this poem, it deserves a title. I was thinkin' something from the last line... just sorta looked like a great summary of the poem's meaning. Very good work! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Alright Allan, I took your advice. Better? Thanks for the response. Jenn "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i really like this poem, you did an awsome job on this. i especially liked the way you wrote the last stanza, it really added a lot of punch to the piece. always like reading your work, i look forward to reading more from you. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thanks so much!!!  "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Jenn, does the last line suggest that you're ready to get serious with someone? Hmmmm, that's not the Jen I know. Ha ha "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Good job on the poem Jenn "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great job on the poem Jenn thanks for the excellent read Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
NOt your best, but i did enjoy the read.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Good job on this one!!! I havent seen much of you lately so im glad to see your posting more often now...yay!!! |
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