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fractal007
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0 posted 2001-05-08 04:10 AM


In worlds where it's detrimental to arrange your
own thought life the way you want it, where one step
into prayer leads to a life of insanity and irrationality, where even one incling of theism is a
cardnal sin, when whips strike the backs of those who
decide not to think the same way as the normal rational
crowd, where every thought counts toward either the
sane or the insane end of the scale, where you get into
trouble for holding beliefs different from others because
you don't think the same way they do and so you decide
to have a sweet old sensible party in the head with your soul
and you get into trouble with the atheist inquisition,
where it's written in the book of life that life's all
the more foolish for living life with meaning,
where it's silly to believe you have a God of Love
in a nihilistic world,
when nobody cares about the choices you make and then
all scream blue murder when you choose differently from them,
where depression and human existential predicaments
run high and happiness runs low in the realm of
stupidity

are those worlds in which I live.


So call to arms

        And camp yourself
                                  for
                                   war
                                    hath
                                     begun!
            defend your
              mind               soothe your soul
with the music     from     of divine love
  and sweet      attackers     serenity
                 be pathological
  Die                 be good           Die
                 last
                  man
                   stands
                    on
                     the
                      field
                    wins*dies


Are you ready for school?
Yes Mom.  I'm ready.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

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cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
1 posted 2001-05-08 04:41 AM


wow...ok that's just struck me dumb DUMB!! do y'hear fractal???
oh my there are so many things i love about this poem that i cant begin to tell you all about it...no...
i love all of it...there you gotta be happy with that!!!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-05-08 09:21 AM


Haha..... I really like the stanza leading up to it.  Really creative.
I can't figure out what the words below it are supposed to be drawing though, sorry.  Little help?
I enjoyed this one quite a bit.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

fractal007
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3 posted 2001-05-08 12:21 PM


Allan and all:

This is one of my new freeverse experiments.  The last stanza is intended to portray the chaos of differing philosophies clashing together in our modern era.  And finally, it demonstrates the only certainty in our existence - death.  

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

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4 posted 2001-05-15 01:27 AM


dude!!!! This was awesome. I totally got this one. VERY VERY well done! School, yep yep.....brainwashing place isn't it? I really enjoyed this poem quite a bit. I like this new expiramentation you're doing. keep it up!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-05-15 01:45 AM


wow!!..this hit me hard...awesome poem frac..and the last stanza was great as well... i just thought the whole poem was amazing......thanks for the read... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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