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Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

0 posted 2001-05-07 06:02 PM

You think I’m stronger,
and walk taller than the rest.
You think I have purpose,
you think I have pride.
You think I stand so firm,
and sit so securely in my trusted seat,
but, really,
I’m the one
usually face down on the ground
when there’s a problem.

You think I always have an answer,
to every one of your petty problems.
Well, if that was the case,
then why can’t I fix
my broken,
helpless,
scared soul?

It’s funny,
I used to think the same things you did.
But a lot of the times,
I fool myself just like I fool you.
And the truth is,
you can doubt anything
if you think about it long enough.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

1 posted 2001-05-07 06:07 PM

id be happy if sumone thought i was good like that..i sure dont know the feeling..but i think i understand..good job on the poem!
*KiM*

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-05-07 10:45 PM

The end thought is brilliant..... seriously, that caught my eye. Just..... wow. Great thought, that will be something I ponder while eating my banana and bowl of "Vector" tomorrow morning.

Excellent work, Marie. The entire poem was so very powerful.... such a wonderful display of your talent.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-05-08 10:19 AM

I definetely agree with allan on this one, the ending of this piece gave me shivers all over my body

your writing is so powerful baby, and i read each poem slowly as if to savor it and keep it from ending for as long as possible. your beautiful words inspire me love, don't ever stop writing incredible poetry.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-05-08 10:25 AM

this is truly beautiful writing..i really liked this poem as always...cya~

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

5 posted 2001-05-08 10:46 AM

Sometimes we can fool our friends or just strangers into thinking that they we are someone other than what we are, and that we are capable of more than we truly are. You expressed this well, and I really like this. Good work.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

Godsend_1
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

6 posted 2001-05-08 11:21 AM

*runs up and give marie a giant hug*
hi hun i love ya you wrote an awesome poem here keep up the awesome work ok bye bye

ben

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

7 posted 2001-05-08 11:32 AM

Hey,

Superb job as always, thank you for yet another excellent poem for my library. You have be posting a lot of your work lately I like that I hope you continue to post this often I really enjoy reading your work. Until your next masterpiece your number 1 fan (arguably of course

)

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2001-05-15 01:44 AM

VERY negative message. Didn't like the message much but you wrote it very well. I liked the poem, actually.
Thought you did quite well on it, but I totally disliked the message. I hope we don't doubt everything, but I guess I just don't like it cuz i know you're right

Good job!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

9 posted 2001-12-11 11:41 AM

Oh jeez....you've just described me..lol.
Way to go on such a fabulous piece. I happen to like negative pieces much better than positive. They tend to speak and read a lot better.

Once again, you have taken my breath away. Keep it up.

~AF~

"Always keep focus on your dreams because most often than not that's all you'll have." - Javier

paper doll
Member

since 2002-08-04

Posts 133
Floating on Uncertainty

10 posted 2002-09-02 09:07 AM

Yes, you can doubt anything. Thought is such an amazing mortal tool. We think we're using it to our advantage when in reality it is our ultimate destruction.

Thank you for such a vivid read. You're one hell of a writer.

~M

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