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Fork in the Road |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
staring at the wall my heart beating faster my body falling *thud* to the floor I am gone I am dead... remember the days life was easy and I was not alone being alone isn't the issue here... it's the drugs it's my life and the hardships the happy moments too no matter how limited still crying on the floor still dead but not so and so much to learn arising from my body- weightless but not only weightless- empty now tell me my friend there has to be a reason this road was less traveled... yet, I took it trying to be brave and unique now here I stand above my lifeless body alone didn't live a life but a moment a moment not long enough and when I died- heard my wings break felt my heart die and I touched the bittersweet rain that tainted my soul the salt that sweetened my brain innocence I spoke of never lost never even existent... so here I stand above my lifeless body a broken soul wandering- crawling- the road less traveled the road less traveled for a reason *Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo or wings, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference* |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow. This is really good. Sad, though. Are ya really feeling like this? Glad to have ya back. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
hey this is a great sad poem..great writing keep it up "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey, it's nice. Sad, yes, but i like how you put it together. Great job. -Allan |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
nice to see you'e decided to join us again Jess  I hope you stay again, we missed you in here As you see there's a lot of new members Why do I sense a lot of pain in your poem? I know life is hard, but be strong thanks for the read keep sharing and don't disappear again  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Robert Frost anybody? nice one here......I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
nah i dont like the dude. but yeah the poem was great. and i think that "road less traveled" thing should be the basis of a poem. i mean its a great story, like how you do your own road. somebody should come up with it.  (i know that robert frost wrote one about it already people dont bite my head off) San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Jenn~thanks hun. I was, think I'm doing better now. Nothing I can't overcome with some sleep and good old fashion attitude (a good one anyways) anomaly~glad to see ya!! Thanks so much for the kind words Allan~thanks so much for the reply. It means a lot!! D~thanks hun. I missed it here!! I'll do my best to stick around for a while. Dopey~well...what can I say. A recurring theme that has yet to die. Thanks for the reply San~thanks so much for the encouragment. *the expected escape is only a portal to true devine Hell...leave that door alone* |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Well written, really good job on this one! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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