Teen Poetry #4 |
the end |
knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
you say youve reached the end you dont want to go any farther you dont want to be here anymore you just want to go away you say that this life is to hard you say that there is no point you say that your not strong enough you say that this is the end you forgot that i was your friend you forgot that i am here for you you forgot that i can help you you forgot that i love you i am your friend i am here for you i can help you I LOVE YOU “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” U in the dark u in the pain u on the run Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-07-2001).] |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
this an awsome poem to lift you friends moods...simple..but sweet (like me hehe..ok ill stop the cheeseyness now) good job tiff *KiM* |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
don't ever stop telling them because people forget too easily. you did a good job on this, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Peter is 100% correct on that one, keep on reminding people of this. Nice work, Tiff! No errors here. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm gonna have to agree with the rest no matter what, let em know thanks for sharing keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
loves u lots tifferz |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i thought the repitition of the way you wrote it marked your point more effectivly..great job and keep writing... ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I cant believe how much this relates to my life right now...its a hard thing isnt it???? I just wanna fix all their problems and make everything alright but its not happening..i swear tonight i was crying in my pillow over the same exact thing...i hope things get easier for you and the person... |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ahh..tough situation. This was a good poem; you said what you wanted to say very well. I hope things get peachy soon...Remember to smile. ~Carly "I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very sweet of you! I enjoyed this one. You have a good heart. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Tiff, you're a sweetheart. No one should ever be without a friend like you. It's a very caring piece. Thanks for the read. ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. ~ Unknown ~ [This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 05-17-2001).] |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
this a good one girl! talk to ya later! robin |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This is a good one. This friend must mean a lot to you. *~*Amanda*~* |
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