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i sit here in silence......maybe?
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i sit here in silence......maybe? |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
i sit here in silence not knowing what to say youve twisted up my emotions put words in my mouth you turned it all around and put the blame on me i sit here in silence but im screaming out load you just cant hear me youve turned a deaf ear you decided in what you believe in and that isnt me i sit here in silence my heart about to break why cant you trust me ive done nothing for this treatment i sit here in silence but im screaming out load wish me luck on me final!!!!  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” U in the dark u in the pain u on the run Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-07-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Good luck on the final, Tiffer!  This poem was great! Very usual for you, which is not a bad thing. It's a good example of most of your favourite techniques and skills. I really like the last line, "wish me luck on the final." That was just...... wow.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
good job..and good luck on your final tiff! haha i agree with allan the whole "wish me luck on my final" part..wow..amazing...really hit home man *KiMMiE* |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Good poem, Tiff. Good luck on finals and I will talk to you when Yahoo IM starts working again. Keep ur chin up, no worries. Take care, *hugs* ali |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done! I really felt you did good on this one. Good luck, and hope to see more!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Well done except for some minor spelling errors. You've really shown your talent lately. I just can't imagine how many poems you write each day "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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MoeRocko Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166West Virginia |
Don't wanna diss ya cause you write these types of poems great, but this seems like a rerun of a past post or two.....:p You DO write these great though. I liked it *hugs* Love ya Tiff..... post some more groovayness soon........  Castles made of sand slip into Sea eventually... |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Beautifully written...excellent job i enjoyed this one |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
good luck and this poem was great...written nicely...i liked it and keep writing tiff if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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