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knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

0 posted 2001-05-06 10:40 PM

okays first offs........i wrote this for a english project in 10th grade so lol peeze be gentle bouts it. lol its soo 'stupis' lols :O but o wells i thought id gives it to u newayz

lols here gos

When i think of you,
I think of love.
YOu are like a heavenly creature sent from above.
When you smile at me it's like the sun
shining directly at me.
You shine so bright i can hardly see.

When i think of you,
I think of a beautiful sky.
YOu make me feel like i could fly.
You are always on my mind,
HOw could u be so blind?

When im not with you
I get so blue.
I want to spend every waking hour with you,
Did u have a clue?
Did u have a clue?
...That i was thinking about YOU!

february 22, 1998

lol thats awful lols...i shouldnt put this up here cuz its so not me or wut i dos lol but o wells......
..i do have to admit that i like a couple of lines so i mights ganks em and just redos it alls

sos there u gos...im bouts to put the others one up that went with the project toos..lol tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-06-2001).]

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-05-07 08:43 AM

Hey, it's not bad! I like things pulled up from our youth, and I really thought this was quite good!
You had a real talent at an early age. That's admirable.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

2 posted 2001-05-07 01:00 PM

I think that this piece really shows that you've come a long way and that you've really expanded on the talent that you've had from the time you wrote this. this is a good idea, i think i'm going to post a few of the poems that i found recently that i wrote in middle school. thanks for the read, and keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

3 posted 2001-05-07 07:29 PM

its not bad at all...wow....i hate digging up old stuff...I SUCKED! lol..anyways..good job hun
*KiMMiE*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-13 06:09 PM

I enjoyed this....pulling things from the old bin is fun......see, when i look at how i used to write....I laugh....it's funny....i sucked but it was funny...now it's just sucky hehe.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-05-17 07:05 PM

Not bad Tiff
Now I see your roots in poetry

keep it up

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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