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Spin me dizzy
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Spin me dizzy |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Spin me dizzy, my friend; make me crazy—again, Hurts to walk the path of life, just to find a dead end And you pretend, life can be all peaches and cream- The Sleeping Beauty fantasy and the all your Disney dreams- They’ve fallen apart, unraveled at the seams, Beauty has pricked her finger upon the wheel, Please take the time, to wipe my heart from your heel Before you drag it across the floor… And I’m just about to the point that I can’t take anymore Before you go, I was wondering – just what you’re leaving for? Asleep for a decade, of human decadence – awaiting that awaking kiss But nothing drifts across the lips, of my emptiness- To break out in laughter, then burst out in tears What wrong with you, what’s the matter my dear Look who’s crying now, the Little Mermaid has lost her tail, The Evil Queen Ursula has stolen her charms, but love can’t fail, At least, that’s what they tell us, in all those fairy tales… Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
whoa, this was really cool.. well written!! $ Jeff $ : ) |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
hehehehe, You know, I liked this. However, I do object to The Little Mermaid being subjected to your torment...SHE ROCKS!!!!! Wonderfully written...as usual. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked this a lot.. written very well.. i think this was a great poem... keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i like this a lot, the flow of this is really cool and the poem is really well written. you did a wonderful job on this, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I can't stand Disney. So I liked this poem a great deal.  ~Allan |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
WOW... i love your writing, this was so great!! very original! i can't wait to see more!! *Justine* |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
allan dont be dissin the disney movies..they rawk! lol..but wheres bambi in the line up man??? anyways this was really good i think the 1st stanza seems serious..and the whole disney thing gives it a lighter touch..but while reading the 1st stanza i kinda imagined it being a song awsome job!!! *KiM* |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Thanks everyone.... This actually began as a song...sigh, then i realized i couldn't sing. Hehe. Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ah don't worry. I sang it for you!  Great poem 'ere..enjoyed much by Susanna and I.~Carly "Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was wonderful! I really enjoyed this one deranger.....I enjoyed it so much my eyes popped out and my butt flew off....yep yep....well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Really Dopey? I'm sure the medical community has a myriad of treatments available for such a...disfiguring ailment. Heh. Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
great read. This is really good and very well expressed. keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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