Teen Poetry #4 |
The Way We Used To Be |
luckyducky_505 Member
since 2001-04-29
Posts 53Kentucky, USA |
I wrote this poem during class one day. I had just broken up with my boyfriend about 3 days befroe this happened. He wanted to go out with this one girl in our school, this didn't bother me. She didn't know why she should go out with him after we just broke up. I gave her reasons and this is what came of it all. You were the light of my life. You were always beside me. I loved the way you never cared about what they thought. I miss the little things that you always did. The way you used to hold me, The way we used to kiss. The way we fought over the little things, The way we made up. I miss and love you so very much. I love you forever andyou mean so much. Can I have you back? [This message has been edited by luckyducky_505 (edited 05-06-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... this is a real pickle you are in. I wish you the best of luck with this, hopefully you'll get what you want out of it. And if you don't, then keep your chin up. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i hope everything turns out ok for you, i know how hard it is to want someone back. great job on this, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a wonderful post. You put a lot of emotion into it. I'm sorry that you're in this situation. I hope things get better. In the mean time, keep writing, it helps Nice work. --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
I liked this a lot, it is a very emotional piece with nothing but pure love behind it. Good job. ~First they tell you, you can’t sleep alone in a strange place, then they tell you, you can’t sleep with somebody else~ |
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luckyducky_505 Member
since 2001-04-29
Posts 53Kentucky, USA |
thanks all for the reply's. This sit. is done and gone. I didn't get him back but he and I are still friends. We talk all the time, we told each other that no matter what there would always be that spot in our hearts for each other. I guess we can't always have what we want!! |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
then it wasnt meant to bew..but atleast u stayed friends! *KiMMiE* good job! |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
ahhh the throes of love *sighs* this situation, excuse my bluntness, sucks... i wish you the best of luck and i hope everything works out for the best. great post! *Justine* -=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
How sweet I really enjoyed this. I think you did a great job and keep it up. Good luck and hope to read more. Lovely_Kris |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done.....you're a very good sport about this....I wouldn't be....i'm evil hehe. Good poem. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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luckyducky_505 Member
since 2001-04-29
Posts 53Kentucky, USA |
Thanx everyone for the reply's and thoughts!!! I'm glad ya'll liked it!!! |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
it's really wonderful, full of emotion, I likes I likes!! I hope things are better for you now...keep your chin up, and keep on smiling!! *s* Stace |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hi hi, wow *states the obvious* that's a really crappy situation. i hope ur okay!! great poem by the way. whoever the guy was he didn't deserve u if he treated u like that!! hope u r okay. -fear- |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great job on the poem and I hope you are ok Mr Mr Zu |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
such gentle and sweet expressions hope things work out keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this was sweet and nice even tho pretty much sad...but u expressed it so well...hope to see more and wish u luck on the situtaion if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Sounds like someone truely special to you, i hope you get them back |
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