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Smlie4u87
Junior Member

since 2001-04-28

Posts 16

0 posted 2001-05-05 10:07 PM

Hey everyone. I wrote this poem when my friend said something that beark my heart and after she said I was crying in my math and skills class, but I think she doesn't know I was crying. Well anyways please tell me what you think of my poem, Thankz.

Always,
Tracy

The rose
The roes was alive
When I give it to you
But now
You have killed it.
Why did you have
to kill the most important
friendship of my life?
The roes was the friendship
we had.
But you have killed the roes
that was keeping us together.
Why did you have to kill it?
The words you said to me
just has killed me.
Why did you?
Those words you said
just made me cry.
Did you just want to see
me cry, is that why?
I thought you were someone
who I could always talk
to about anything.
Someone who is always
here for me.
But you just didn’t want
to hear the reason why.
When you were one of
the people who asked why.
You were like a sister to me
but words you have said
just really hurt me.
It beak my heart.
That was the reason
why I was crying after
you said those words.
Let me ask you something,
did you know that what you
said made me cry,
did you know that?

LoveBug

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Member Elite

since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

1 posted 2001-05-05 10:41 PM

This is a really tough situation. You portray these sad and powerful emotions really well. This really belongs in Teen poetry, though, so I'm going to move it over there. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-05-06 02:37 AM

Well done on the poem! Hope to see more!
You did well! Good luck!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-05-06 12:47 PM

Since this a double post, I'm closing this thread. If anyone wants to reply to this poem then please go here to reply: /pip/Forum45/HTML/002238.html

--Marie

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