Teen Poetry #4 |
What Am I Worth? |
The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
OK well let me just explain this post a bit. I wrote this when I felt kinda depressed. I didn't originally think of the end. It just kinda came to me at the end. But I was questioning how I could be worth anything, when I didn't like myself and it was obvious that those around me really didn't truly care. As may have already noticed, most of my poems have to do with some aspect of my walk with God, or something about him. I'm not a huge bible thumper (although Allen might chose to disagree) It's simply that God is the only thing in my life that doesn't fail me and has never abandoned me. ___________________________________ What am I worth? Well I am worth, what? My humor? No most people don’t even like it. Then what? What could I be worth? Well I could be worth, what? My intellect? No when is the last time anyone cared about that? Then what? What might I be worth? Well I might might be worth, what? My art? No even I know that so many people can do much better. Then what? What would I be worth? Well I could be worth, what? My creativity? No no one cares about that. Then What? What am I worth? Well I think it is, Nothing, This is all rags! Pathetic! Who cares if I can crack a joke? When was the last time you respected that man alone in the corner? No one cares what I make! When was the last time you cared that I thought different? And yet, maybe I should ask, why was I worth a crucifixion? ___________________________________ I wanna thank Jeremy who gave me a tip for the ending. I showed it to him last night, and he suggested two small changes. And I think they make it work better. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
An excellent poem, Dave. Nicely done. And for the record, there are people who care about your intellect. Sorry if I don't show it often enough. -Allan |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
(The Lost Supertone ponders what Allen is saying... then realizes that Allen is talking about the naked elder berry children in the grove of trees by the shineing purple plasma stone) Yeah but they think everyone's smart... they think Cory's smart! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow, berry children. Never seen those. I usually hang out in the forest of Gwilderbog with my dirty minded, one armed, chinese speaking forest gnome friend, Gwildor. Maybe they know him. Nice post....me likes. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
man you hang our with Gwildor and havn't met the naked elder berry children? Man they have poker night on thursday! I can't belive he's never at least told you about them! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
*looks at gwildor* DUDE!!!!!!! Yea well I think i'll be attending poker night cuz yea, I need to lose my money somehow. Maybe you and me can plot something against allan......that'd be nice. Get the silly, bo-legged wart people to ambush him and throw him into a black jellybean pond infested with bullfrog egg and maggot larvea. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
NO!!!! god dope! you know Gwildor cant do that! hes lactose intolerant San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
(The Lost Supertone looks at Allen, then looks at Dopey) LETS GET ALLEN! (They take Allen by the arm and legs and toss him into the jelly bean pool) That ought to do, anyone got anything to add?? Oh and Dopey you really should consider poker at Gwildor's. We have some Pizza, and Sugar cubes.... eventually were so screwed up we start falling in love with random peices of furnature [This message has been edited by acire (edited 01-23-2001).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hmmmm, good job on the poem, but I'm a little afraid of you people now "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
No need to fear... just be happy! HAP HAP HAPPY! |
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