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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
I thought I'd found a haven That it might be different this time Ravening hordes demons... Thought that I'd left them behind I thought that there was someplace Refuge could be found From the very pit of despair Thought that I'd found that place... But all I found Was a trial worse than any before Faced apastacy at every turn And only dark clouds on the horizon "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. [This message has been edited by DragonFang (edited 05-04-2001).] |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Wow i really liked this a lot. good job. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Good job, but watch for spelling... "dark coulds on the horizon" makes sense, and the worst kind of typoes are the ones that change the meaning of the poem. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i really liked the image that you creted in my mind with this piece. good job on this, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
thanks for the heads up allan ~_~ I was in a sorta bad mood when I wrote it/typed it up, so I didn't really catch that. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very nice, Dragon. I really liked the imagery in this piece. I enjoyed this quite a bit. Nicely done. --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
interesting poem....you write dark poems a lot... Ravening hordes demons was a wonderful piece of imagery id like to delve into your mind for two seconds to find out what you're feeling..  "Life is not long and boring, |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
hehe...allan...always correcting...gawd anyways good poem...kinda dark...but i liked it good job~ *KiM* |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
~cherish~ I write dark poems to channel my negetive energy into something useful. I write love poems a lot too... but I don't share a whole lot of those ~_~. Also, I HIGHLY doubt that you'd want to delve into my mind. My mind spends 90% of it's time trying to get out of itself so it dosn't have to live through the torments and the other 10% of the time contemplating going off for a coffee break. ~_~ j/k "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Quite dark, but very enjoyable. I liked the poem very much!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Very enjoyable read indeed. It leaves me wanting more though. keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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