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knightlyshadows
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obscured vision

0 posted 2001-05-03 03:15 PM


Shifting light
Black and blue
Hiding inside
yourself

Contagious hypocrisy
Holding your tongue
Lying eyes
yourself

Finding faults
Taste of blood
Heartfelt honour
yourself

Continuation of
Deprevation and struggle
Honesty hurts
yourself



“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-03-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Tiffany Durham - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-03 03:57 PM


i liked this poem...
it was on the more serious side
which i liked...
good job on the poem..keep writing
and wheres ben?lol

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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2 posted 2001-05-03 04:33 PM


Nice work!  A serious poem, and you did it all yourself.     You're a big girl now, Tiffy.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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3 posted 2001-05-03 04:35 PM


Very nice work, Tiffany!  I enjoyed this.  Nicely done.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

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4 posted 2001-05-04 01:55 PM


I enjoyed this. Very powerful piece.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-05-18 02:32 PM


This can be said to be one of your best poems.  Well, at least one of my favorites of yours.  You did really good on this one.  Thanks for Sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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