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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Again..don't ask me what it means I just wrote the thing. I can poison you with my thoughts with my intent the fear will ensue after I poison you with my twisted dreams and polished nightmares there is nothing you can do you see I've done it before using my pains and sadness go ahead open the door I'me behind it waiting in my nest waiting to infest slowly taking just a little bit I'll bring you here with my frightful visions and numbing illusions you'll feel the fear the fear thats already there I didn't bring it just revealed it run if you dare hide under your sheets pretend your safe close your eyes to all the evil just outside it waits waiting for you to start to shake and drip with sweat the fear you never knew I poison you with fears brought you to a new world a world of pain and regret don't worry I'll save your tears mix them with mine because I'm there too brought here because of you on eachother we shall dine as we lay here and rot slipping into eternity still consumed by fear now the pain is all we've got "It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ< |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
WOW ok scary thoughts *hides* that was great! i loved it! the flow the context, everything bout it! great job! lol tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
the short lines made the flow really good and i liked a lot of the images that you presented in this piece. this poem kinda reminded me of enter sandman by metallica so that was good times. anyway, great job on this, i always like reading your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Wow!!! this is amazing.... your best.... definalty a library piece...... do me a favor don't poison my thoughtts, thanks babe. Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"I poison you with fears brought you to a new world a world of pain and regret don't worry I'll save your tears" Wow.. this is one of the best posts I've seen from you, POA. VERY nicely done! The images made this piece very powerful. Nice work! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This one was awesome. I really liked it. Very dark, and twisted - I love that in a poem. Badass! Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great discription.. i really enjoyed this one good job POA! keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
ohh yea...on the title.. i have no idea..hehe..cya ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
To be honest, I don't know that much about poetry- but I know what I like. And I think, so far, this is probably my favorite of all the poems I have read here. I love it. It's wonderful! |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
i dont think that there is much more i can say about this poem..im speechless... no..ok words are coming back to me..: I LOVED IT!!!!!! awesomemundo poem!!!!!!!!! "Life is not long and boring, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey this was pretty great. I fully enjoyed this one!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This is truly magnificently writteN!!! I like it alot alot alot!! Great work, im very impresed... ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
wow..for sumthign that was off the top of your head..hell for anything..thios was prwetty awsome..i really liked it...good read~ *KiM* |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This was a great write but one thing bothers me....Why would you want to hurt others, even if it's psychological/mental? I don't get it.....Well, good post anyways "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Just for acire's concerns to be put to rest. I don't want to hurt others. The "I" in the poem isn't me. Granted all poems are an extension of the writer, that doesn't mean that the man who made 'nightmare on Elm St.' wants to have those things actually happen to people. I guess you could say this is just the darker side of my imagination. But thats all it is, imagination. Anyways I'm glad you and the other liked my poem. "It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ< |
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