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knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

0 posted 2001-05-03 11:46 AM

i run to my safe place
each time i have a need
it is there i am protected
it is there i am relieved

lost in the ramblings
of this place
surrounded by nothing
but silence and trees

trusting in nothing
...but this silence
...and these trees

i tell the trees my hearts desires
i tell the trees my dreams
i tell the trees my soulful wishes
i tell the trees my needs
i tell the trees my deepest secrets
i tell the trees my Everything

and i trust in nothing
...but this silence
...and these trees

as i run to my safe place
each time i have a need

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-03-2001).]

Godsend_1
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

1 posted 2001-05-03 11:52 AM

hey baby i love you great poem you have an awesome talent keep it up and make me proud *kisses* i love you

ben

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

2 posted 2001-05-03 01:15 PM

i liked how you used the repitition in this piece to make everything come full circle with the couplet at the end. i liked the images that you presented with this too. great job, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-05-03 01:19 PM

Another poem that's very nicely written. This reminds me of another one I just read from you. The way you use the italics in your works puts more power to the words, and the couplet at the end works very well. I've seen that a lot in your work, and I like that. Nice job.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-04 01:46 PM

The trees love you too tiff.
Well done on this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-05-05 02:34 AM

Yes, I too love the use of italics in this one. It really gave a different sense to the italicized lines. Very mysterious...
Very well done!

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

katherine
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

6 posted 2001-05-05 02:56 AM

this is so good
the repition is great and the itallics really add to the efect of it. well done.
katie

if you don't let them in they can't see the real you

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-06-06 07:09 PM

"i tell the trees my hearts desires
i tell the trees my dreams
i tell the trees my soulful wishes
i tell the trees my needs
i tell the trees my deepest secrets
i tell the trees my Everything

and i trust in nothing
...but this silence
...and these trees"

You know, I'm actually the same

I love it Tiff
keep em coming

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